rate my poems please?

hi so if u can check out my poems and let me know which 1 is the best (though they r not that good) i would really appreciate it and how to make them better thanks

Depressed mode

Taking one step at a time
Used to be so easy
Living life to the fullest
Seemed to be so exciting
But after losing the second half of my spirit
Living more is like a cold blooded killer
Cruelty of the world pushes you to the limit
Where killing your self seems to be the only way that you can rest for a minute
Every breath that i take is full of tragic
I have to give my self all the credit
I used to count the people that I love
But now I have no one to think of
Wondering how my life will end up
Will I ever find the man that I adore
Or will I remain sitting in this corner all alone
Screaming out loud from the deep of my heart
Laying in the darkness trying to figure out
Why my life turned to be such a big fat lie
I turned my back for a moment and all the people that I like
Suddenly vanished in a blink of an eye

Mixed emotions

Walking along the street
I saw you beside a tree
I looked into your eyes
And I just felt so alive
You took my heart and my soul
I couldn’t breathe anymore
You became the air that I inhale
The dream that kept me awake
In a second of that day
I thought I’d never cry again
Until you faded away
Now you’re the source of my pain
My friends said it’ll be okay
He is not worth it anyway
The only thing I can say
I still love you till today
The thought of losing you is scary
But it’s too late to say you’re sorry
I begged you to stay
But you pushed me and ran away
I guess it’s time for good bye
Moving on is what I’m going to try

The last thoughts

Have you ever tried?
To commit suicide
Have the knife in your hand
Trying to decide
Where should you be stabbed?
After you’re left behind
In my heart? You asked
Or just push it through my back?
What ever you choose
When you see the blood rushing out throw the wound
You get confused
Trying to get the knife removed
Your life flashes in front of you
Wondering in the last second
What in the world did I do?
Calling a hospital near by
To help you get cure
When they finally arrive
It’s to late you realized
This time it’s really true
What you’re going through
It can’t be stopped
You should’ve thought enough
Only one hour passed
And now your history and past

Bad routine

The alarm is ringing
Your eyes are opening
Your day is beginning
With a cup of coffee ready for drinking
First hour is calming
Second hour people are calling
What you are hearing
Doesn’t seem so pleasing
The third hour you are spending
In trying to solving
All the troubles that are happening
While you were showering
Hurry up time is passing
Your day is ending
While your doing nothing
After a while your friend is visiting
At least you’ll have a shoulder for crying
When she arrives you start fighting
Oh my god when is it time for relaxing
Midnight is coming
Finally you can get ready for sleeping
The only way for resting
Never waking up is what you’re hoping
But still the alarm keeps on ringing
Another day is starting
And again troubles are gathering

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Djordje April 25, 2010 at 8:05 pm: Not bad. A tad mainstream, a little overly emo, but not bad. I have done some of the stuff you mentioned. It is not nearly as hard as you make it seem. But I like the poem.
Katrina April 25, 2010 at 8:31 pm: Nice, motivating , pleasurable……
Words r less for the emotion expressed by your poem.

u get 10 on 10 from me !!!!!!!!!!!
I appreciate u ………..

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